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20 March 2011 @ 05:36 am
SMAP drabble: On the 30th floor  
Title: On the 30th floor.
Pairing: Kimura/Nakai
Rating: None
Disclaimer: Fanfiction by a fan for fans; I do not make money from this.
Type: Drabble
Summary: It's morning and few words being said; coffee no-one is drinking and the view is good from up there, though no-one takes any notice of it.
Notes: I'm not sure what this is or where it came from, but it basically wrote itself and I decided to post it. Please read if you want :)
On the 30th floor.
Nakai's hand reaches his face, cupping his left cheek slightly.
No eye-contact. He's embarrassed and Kimura notices, but does nothing, says nothing. He's standing there, arms limp down by his side. Nakai rests his face in Kimura's shirt just below his collarbone, and sighs, barely audible.
The two cups of coffee on the table are slowly going cold - already forgotten and left completely untouched.

"I'm sorry."

Kimura's heart shatters when he hears the guilt in Nakai's voice. Not able to hold back anymore he embraces him in a tight hug and allows himself to let out a long sigh as well, and whispers, his words so silent he's not sure Nakai can even hear them.

"It's not your fault."

Slowly, almost anxiously, Nakai puts his arms around Kimura  and without wanting to, a strangled sob finally finds its way through his dry lips.

Kimura have to tilt his head slightly backwards to keep tears from falling.

"It's... it's not your fault."

The only other sound that can be heard is the early morning traffic, some fifty meters below them, through a tiny, open window.
Current Mood: tiredtired
25lalalee3625lalalee36 on March 20th, 2011 08:43 am (UTC)
GUH, you really got me... Now I'm really really curious about what had happened...
It's so touching... Thank you soooo much, it's so sweet
Michellemisherru on March 20th, 2011 03:24 pm (UTC)
The truth is, I'm really curious as well...! I'm not sure, but maybe this is something I can use later, if I ever do a longer story. I'm not sure. Maybe I should just leave it as it is.

Anyway, thank you so much for reading! Your comment makes me so happy <3
ficofthegoblin: kimura/nakai seriousficofthegoblin on March 20th, 2011 11:24 am (UTC)
What a lovely - and intriguing - piece of angst. (With all the horribleness in this country right now, somehow reading angst feels most appropriate.)

Won't you consider posting on smapxslash?
Michellemisherru on March 20th, 2011 03:27 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much for reading! And as I mentioned, I don't know where this came from, but it's not impossible that's a bit of sad, negative energy from the last couple of days..

I thought about it, but I wasn't sure it wasn't appropriate since it's not exactly anything big happening in this little drabble.. But if you'd like me to, I'd be more than happy to post it there as well :)
ficofthegoblin: kimura/nakai seriousficofthegoblin on March 21st, 2011 09:40 am (UTC)
Sure, it's no problem - I'd even recommend putting your previous fic, which was even more platonic, on the comm. Because whether it's romantic or sexual or friendship, it's the relationship between SMAP members that fascinates all us SMAP slashers.
maybe I'm the afterglow: a song for your 2tophereticpop on March 20th, 2011 12:48 pm (UTC)
*sniff* this is sad. but good. I kind of like how it's so vague, you're practically leaving the whole story for the reader to decide and just give a glimpse of one scene.

The two cups of coffee on the table are slowly going cold - already forgotten and left completely untouched.
for some reason I really like this little detail. and that it's a morning. I like mornings.

and in the end, it's 2top angst. I couldn't not melt over 2top angst. ;)
Michellemisherru on March 20th, 2011 03:41 pm (UTC)
What I ended up with this little thing in the end, what exactlty that as well; You can interpret almost anything to what actually happened. I'll let everyone have their own view of the story, though I'm not completely sure what my own is :P

I don't know what this is, but there's just something about coffee. I often find myself writing stories, always mentioning coffee, and I have absolutely no clue why.

I'm glad you read it and liked it! Thank you so much :)
zombiezahn: SMAP no Nakaizombiezahn on March 20th, 2011 02:37 pm (UTC)
OMG - so few words, but you totally got me *shiver*
I like the way you portray Kimura's & Nakai's relationship - with lots of unsaid words and even more for us readers to imagine.

Thanks for this touching piece ♥
Michellemisherru on March 20th, 2011 03:43 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much for your kind words! :) I feel this is so open anyone reading it can imagine just exactly what they want :)

I'm happy you liked it! Thank you for reading and reviewing <3
pu_ni_yopu_ni_yo on March 20th, 2011 04:10 pm (UTC)
Ahhh... so angsty but so good ^^
You really made me curious about what happened between Captain and Nakai... hum... xD